Carrie narrowed her eyes as she searched through the produce.
"Do you have any raspberries, Mr. Wells?" she asked.
He stood slowly, his arms supporting his body on the chair as his legs unfolded. Standing, he eyed the produce, scratching his chin thoughtfully. "I know the boys picked some this morning." He shifted the bins overflowing with leafy greens. "Hold tight. They ought to be around here somewhere."
Carrie waited while he made his way towards the truck parked behind the umbrella. She bent down to kiss the top of Emily's head, the downy hair tickling her nose. "What do you think, sweetheart? Do you think Mr. Wells is going to have raspberries so Mama can make creme brulee tonight?" Emily gurgled a reply. "I think you're right. We may have to go with chocolate cake."
Carrie propped the handle of the red wagon filled with fresh vegetables and fruit against the table. The gardens at Hidden Hollow supplied most of the produce she needed, but she still liked to wander the weekly Farmers' Market.
Carrie picked up a tomato, its skin tight and firm. "This is gorgeous." Emily flapped her arms. "I know, baby. We have tomatoes." She set it back down on the table, her fingers lingering on the glossy surface. "I could always do a caprice salad for lunch tomorrow," she murmured. Emily's tiny fist caught Carrie's hair. She yanked. "Ouch!" Carrie untangled the strands. "You're right. We have enough tomatoes."
Mr. Wells stepped in front of them, a single box of raspberries in his hands. "Here you go. I knew I had some somewhere. Ain't many left," he apologized.
Carrie dug a handful of crumpled bills out of the pocket of her skirt. "We'll still take them." She took raspberries and started to set them down. The berries glistened, tempting.
Carries smiled as she walked away. Selecting a plump berry, she popped it into her mouth, the flavor exploding on her tongue. "You're going to love these next summer, little one." She ate another, a smile on her face at the sublte sweetness of the fruit.
Emily's arms flapped, her legs kicking while she gurgled in excitement. "Wow. You are looking forward to it," Carrie said, amusement tinging her voice.
"Hello Carrie."
The box of raspberries fell to the ground.
This is a fictional post inspired by the Write on Edge prompt: flavor.As usual, concrit is always helpful. No. Seriously. My fiction writing is a tad bit rusty, so I'd love feedback.
20 comments:
Well that's a dirty trick! What happens next? WHAT HAPPENS NEXT???
I definitely enjoyed the passage and the relationship of mother to daughter! Knowing the whole of the storyline, I can only imagine what got Carrie to drop her fruit!
Oh no, is Todd back?! Ack!
As for the farmer's market, I could picture it and it makes sense that you can take us so clearly there, drawing on your own love for grown fruit & veggies. :> Glad you're sharing some fiction with us!
Ooh, I want to know what happened now! (Or maybe I've missed something?) I love how she's talking with the baby and the foods around. Lovely. :)
Doh! Talk about a surprise ending! You are going to tell us what's next, right?
Fabulous! I love all of the little details of fruits and vegetables and the nuances of a mother chatting with her unspeaking child.
Then the end. The perfect example of "show don't tell". Her shock is so clear.
Gorgeous. And, now I really want raspberries. I hope whoever made her drop them was worth it!
Oh, food fowl. I cringed. Great job!
No, not the raspberries!
Yes, yes the story!
Creme brulee? Chocolate cake? Maybe I need to make a trip to Hidden Hollow!
I always love the details you put in your writing, painting an ALMOST full picture...and then there is that part you always leave out.
Temptress.
It's obvious I'm dieting and dreaming about food, isn't it?
LOL What a waste of a perfectly delicious box of freshly washed berries.
Thanks!
Something tells me it could go either way here.
Sometimes Carrie tends to be a "victim". I wanted show her to be a loving mother, a happy shopper, a lover of food.
Of course! As soon as the story tells me...
Poor Carrie has had a rough year. :)
I don't know!
I'm glad I got to write this too. :)
There are two major players that could make her drop the fruit. Not sure which way it's going to go.
It's a HORRIBLE trick. I HATE it when people pull it on me.
But it gets ya to wondering, doesn't it.
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