A man stood on the other side clutching a brown paper bag in one hand.
Reaching into the jar next to the door, Honey grabbed a handful of silver coins and crumpled bills.
"Thanks, Jimmy," she said as she started counting.
"No problem," the man said, settling against her door jam. "You really need to start getting that ready before I show up. You make me late for my other deliveries."
Honey bit back a retort as she dumped the change into his hand. "You can't be that busy tonight."
"You'd be surprised." Straightening, he pocketed the money. "Merry Christmas, Honey."
Honey locked the door behind him and walked into the kitchen of her tiny studio. She snorted to herself. Kitchen. What a stupid word for a space the size of her closet back home. She set the Chinese food on the stove top, opening the oven door and grabbing a pair of slippers.
Her mother would have had a conniption at the thought of using an oven for storage. Honey smiled sadly. Her mother wouldn't have thought it was possible to spend this much money for an apartment without a working range. She swallowed the thickness in her throat, feeling her eyes prick.
She grabbed a pair of chopsticks out of the cup next to the sink and opened the paper bag, the smell of sweet and sour pork making her stomach rumble. She'd been too busy to eat since breakfast.
She settled her aching body on the chair next to the window and began to eat. Looking out at the city, full of the noise of bustling people and honking horns, she noticed, dispassionately that it had begun to snow.
This is a work of fiction. Yes. Fiction. Can you believe I'm back in Hidden Hollow today? This week's prompt from Write on Edge made me wonder how Honey's doing now that she's realized her dream of living in the big city. I'm starting to think it's not all it's cracked up to be.As always, concrit would be appreciated.
20 comments:
The slippers in the oven? Perfect. Poor Honey. (And whodathunk in the beginning I'd ever say that? She's such a great character...)
Oh I love this. And I'm so glad you're writing fiction again. And using an oven for storage? Sounds like something I could do!
Oh, I can't wait to hear more about Honey! And to be honest, I thought this was going in a totally different direction - I wasn't sure what the delivery was!
I remember way back when I thought I didn't like Honey, and now I think she's such a great character. The sad details are what get me here: paying for part of her food in change, slippers in the oven.
Pre-kids, Ryan and I always had Chinese on Christmas night. Maybe we should bring that back.
We're getting such a different side of Honey now. She's not such a bad girl after all.
The beginning makes me curious as to what she has been doing if she is still in her black stilettos AND has a headache.
The paragraph starting with using the oven for storage, is excellent. It reveals a lot about Honey.
There's depth of character here and that really good. I'm going to pour thru other entries. It sounds like Im missing some great stuff..
Well done and thank you for my comment. Good luck with your different kind of Christmas this year.
I'm new to Honey and her (apparently) ongoing tale. But this one post was enough to make me want to get to know her better.
I, too, am surprised by how much I like Honey here. This is a great take on the prompt.
You know Mandy, now that i read this character of yours Honey, i want to know more about her... i am never surprised to come back here and read because you always add the necessary components to lighten up a piece. This is brilliant writing... i esp. loved the connection that you make with Honey's past... it is so thriving and it makes us want to know more all at once.
I don't think NYC is what she thought it would be...but seriously, karma's a bitch and she has a bit to pay back yet.
I'm glad too. I've missed it and this prompt seemed to fit. :)
She's a pretty interesting character. One of my favorites.
And she's so lonely. Christmas by herself with just her sweet and sour. She was, and still is, totally bitchy, somewhat vain and self-centered, but at the same time, I like her.
Something tells me NYC isn't what she thought. I'm glad you like her. She's always been one of my favorites. It's kind of fun writing a character who isn't sugar and spice.
Thanks. I haven't had much of a chance to hang with these characters lately. I'm glad this prompt niggled a few brain cells. :)
She started off as a very bad, very fun side character and now she's my favorite.
Thanks!
Thanks...I'm trying to write more fiction again. I'm a little stiff at the moment, but am hoping I can start working out the kinks. :)
Great take on the prompt, it's strong and made me wonder a lot about her circumstances and what had brought her here. :)
Oh, how I am so glad to be back this week AND that one of my favorite characters is too!! I love Honey...she is such a great character!!
The slippers in the oven? Awesome! You describe a NYC pad perfect.
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