Thursday, September 15, 2011

Bruising Honey

The bell jangled as the salon door opened. Honey looked up from her station and glanced at the clock. Twenty more minutes would have seen her locking the door and heading home. She pasted a smile on her face as a short brunette walked to the counter. "How can I help you?"

"Um," the girl glanced around the salon. "I need a," her eyes dropped to her hands. "I need a manicure!" She held up her hands, displaying ten ragged fingernails.

"Pick a color," Honey sighed. The girl needed more than a manicure. Her frizzy hair stood out on end around a face devoid of make-up. A cotton shirt clung to her plump curves while a pair of faded jeans sagged off her hips. She clutched her oversized bag and an envelope in one hand.

The girl glanced around again, catching Honey staring. She reached her hand out blindly and grabbed a color, thrusting it towards Honey.

"Viola Violet?" Honey questioned, raising one perfectly arched eyebrow.

"Um. Yeah. I like purple."

Shrugging Honey gestured toward a chair while she collected the tools of her trade. The sooner she got this duckling out of here, the sooner she'd be able to go home and see Todd. The last few weeks had been a dream; Todd in her bed every night and at her breakfast table every morning.

Lifting the girls hands, she set them in a bowl of warm water before grabbing a fresh towel from the shelf beneath her station.

"So your name's Honey?"

Great. A talker. Keeping the smile pasted on her face, she replied, "That's what my mama called me." And what's on my nametag. "What's your name, sweetie?"

"Kristi." The girl's eyes darted around the room. "It's quiet in here."

"I was about to close up. You made it just in time." Honey took one Kristi's hands out of the water, starting to work. "When's the last time you had a manicure?"

"I've...uh...never had one." Honey glanced up in surprise. Kristi's jeans may be faded, but she'd recognized the logo. If this girl had never had a manicure, it wasn't because she couldn't afford it.

Kristi shifted in her seat, her freckled skin flushing making her green eyes brighten. Honey narrowed her eyes in consideration. She had good bones, a nice complexion. A hot oil treatment, an eyebrow wax and a little make up, some clothes that fit and she might actually be passable.

Honey worked in silence, efficiently sweeping purple paint over each nail.

"You ever been in love, Honey?"

"Sure. I fell for him when I was a little younger than you and I still love him." Her mouth twisted in a rueful smile.

"Have you ever had a broken heart?"

"So that's what this is about?" Poor girl was probably in love with some boy who wouldn't look at her twice. Maybe she'd suggest a wax after the manicure. There was really no excuse for those eyebrows.

"No. I was just wondering. I've never been in love. I've seen love and what it can do. It's not pretty."

"It can be ugly," Honey agreed, remember when she'd read Todd's wedding announcement in the paper. Seeing his face smiling next to that damn Betty Crocker had sent a fist into her gut for months. The only way she'd gotten through it was by going through a few men of her own. Her stomach clenched again at the memory.

Honey finished, screwing the top back on the polish.

"Thanks," Kristi smiled at her nails as she stood.

"You need to sit under the dryer."

"No. That's okay. I'll be careful." Holding her fingers awkwardly, she shoved two twenties at Honey.

"That's too much!" she protested, but Kristi had already walked out the door. Looking down, she spied the forgotten envelope. Picking it up, she strode to the door, reaching it as the tail lights left the parking lot. "Damn," she muttered. Looking down, she saw her name scrawled across the envelope.

"What the hell?" Opening it, she pulled out a pile of pictures, an icy cold fist slamming into her stomach.

This post was inspired by the Write on Edge prompt "Describe your character's first heartbreak." I played a little loose with it, trying to give a bit of insight into Honey and also give you a hint as to where the Envelope came from.

If you enjoyed this bit of Hidden Hollow, go to Fictional Mandyland and read more.

37 comments:

sweetbutterbliss said...

Damn it! A cliff hanger. I want to know what's going on. Great writing.

The Drama Mama said...

Ooooooooooo. I love your cliffhangers! What's next? What are the pictures of? MORE!

Galit Breen said...

Oh you and your karate chop ending.

I couldn't possibly love them more. :)

Angela said...

You're making me LIKE Honey :)  I can sense her tiredness, stuckness in this piece.  I almost feel like her reaction to Kristi is like my immediate reaction to her.  I felt like she was such a homewrecker, and now I realize there's more to her story.

Stacey said...

OH man! What an ending! I do like Honey in this piece and I love the girl that comes in. You did a great job with that! You drew me right into the story.

The JackB said...

I want to know what is in the letter.

Mrs. Jen B said...

Gaaaaaasp! Kristi! And now I'm remembering the socks!

You are so good.

Sara said...

I haven't read the other parts of this story, but that didn't stop me from really liking this one. You are very good at creating your characters.

I think I can guess who this girl is without knowing more...you left good bread crumbs... but that doesn't mean I wouldn't WANT to read more. Honey is excellent character and she makes me curious about who she is and how she'll resolve this. I loved how you described her reaction to her "heartbreak" getting married.

Thanks for this. I'll go back and read some more...

kathleensomuchtosay said...

Achk! I can infer so much from this, even though there's obviously a lot I have missed by this being my first visit to the meme. Nicely done all the way around!

Kir said...

every "Homewrecker" has a heart somewhere. When I think of my own story or the past I wish I didn't have, I remember that I loved those men, it wasn't me trying to wreck anything. Honey is human and likable and just a girl who has loved Todd for most of her life. You SHOWED us this in so many ways, from the descriptions of her nails, to the beauty salon, and as always your dialouge is second to none! I loved every word of this.

it was great to see where those pictures and her AGONY and RAGE came from as she left them that day. Great job 

Pepca said...

Oh, what a twist at the end! Well done! 

Andrea B. said...

DAMN IT. I knew it. Damn. Poor Honey.

Loved this. Well written, well felt, with all the right emphasis in all the right places. :( Well done. I really loved it, even if I knew what was coming and was totally pissed off as I read. Grrr. ;)

AwayWeGoNancy said...

You were right. I like Honey a lot. Because she's a survivor. She strikes me as one that has been knocked down a few times, and yet she still has enough in her to do a good job and listen a bit.

And that ending? Beyond good.

Noted a picky grammar thing: "girls" should be "girl's

Amy L. said...

Loved the writing, also first time reading so have a few questions. More please?

CDG said...

Nicely done with Honey. I love that you're not afraid to make her vulnerable, wicked, gentle, conflicted, snarky--the whole package.

Carrie said...

Dammit! I loved this...but I'm also confused. I clicked back and now I see where Kristi comes from (she's the nanny) but how does all this fit chronologically?
Kristi delivers the envelope to Honey, who in turn delivers it to Carrie?? Or are there TWO envelopes and Kristi has seen both sides and wants to make sure both Honey and Carrie REALLY understand what kind of man they are involved with?

Regardless, loved it. Did I say that? :)

MyLittleMiracles said...

Oh Oh Oh I can't wait to read more! Dang Mandy you drag me in every time!!! 

mandyland said...

Kristi gives the envelope to Honey who gives it to Carrie before she leaves town.

I'm so glad you liked it!

mandyland said...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I seem to have a story going...If you go to "Fictional Mandyland" up top, there's a whole series. This piece fits in right before "The Envelope".

mandyland said...

I like Honey a lot. More than I thought I would. :)

And I love picky grammar. Thanks!

Cheryl said...

yegads i love Honey. She's too good for Todd!

mandyland said...

I know, right? I really like Honey...she's so imperfectly perfect.

mandyland said...

LOL I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

mandyland said...

Thanks for the emails, lady. :)

mandyland said...

She's so sympathetic and yet not. I really like her a lot.

mandyland said...

Thanks!

mandyland said...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I've enjoyed painting a picture of Honey.

mandyland said...

Thanks so much! I hope you get a chance to check out the full story under Fictional Mandyland. I've really had a lot of fun writing about Honey.

mandyland said...

I hope you've had a chance to go back and read more about Honey and all the characters in Hidden Hollow. She's my favorite. Mostly because she started off so mean and bitchy and then...somewhere along the line...I really started to like her.

mandyland said...

Dum dum DUM! The plot thickens. lol

mandyland said...

Go read The Envelope.

mandyland said...

Thank you!

mandyland said...

Exactly! I really loved to dislike Honey from the get go. Now, I just love to love her.

mandyland said...

Thank you!

mandyland said...

Go read The Envelope to find out...

mandyland said...

Check out The Envelope and Leaving Town to find out more...

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