This was absolutely the last time, Honey thought as she eased her body out from under a masculine arm. She inched herself to a standing position and stared down at the man tangled in her sheets. His long, lean body was bare except where the lavender cotton wrapped around his waist. She quietly padded across the room, scooping up her robe on her way to the door.
Easing it open, she slid the soft satin over her body and walked into the bathroom. Flicking on the light, she stared at herself in the mirror.
Her golden hair was a mass of knots and curls. Her cheeks and chin were red from the scrape of Todd's whiskers. Raising a perfectly manicured hand to her swollen lips, she lightly touched them. She blinked back the tears that filled her mascara rimmed eyes.
Her mother hadn't even been in the grave three days and she was already screwing a married man. Again.
She turned on the faucet and splashed her face, the cold water sending a shiver through her body. Toweling herself dry, she contemplated the array of cosmetics neatly lining her vanity. Shrugging away the guilt, she started to put on her mask.
As she smoothed the foundation across her forehead, she thought of Todd. His knock in the middle of the night had startled her. Sitting in the living room, sifting through old photographs and half way through a bottle of vodka, she hadn't expected him or his words, "I've left Carrie," he'd slurred. "I want you."
Honey dipped her fingers into her pot of blush, dabbing it along her cheekbones. She wondered why she didn't feel the triumph she'd always expected when he finally left that little Betty Crocker. She'd welcomed him into her bed, but she paused at the thought of welcoming him back into her life.
She wiped her fingers on the damp cloth and stared at the face in the mirror.
In the unforgiving light, she could see the fine wrinkles around her mouth, the hardness in her eyes. Gone was the dewy-faced girl who'd fallen in love with the star running back on the high school football team. Gone was the romantic teenager who'd grinned all through her senior year. She, Honey McBain, a girl with an absent father and a mother who'd grown old before her time, was going to go somewhere, be someone. With that beautiful boy.
Now she was a cliche. Sleeping with another woman's husband. Working two jobs to pay off hospital bills.
How had this happened?
Honey's mouth tightened. Plucking a tube of mascara out of a cup on the side of the sink, she leaned forward and darkened her lashes. Finished, she swiped Honey Heaven across her lips and puckered, her face complete. Pulling the belt of her robe firmly, she walked back into her bedroom.
She opened the door. Todd sprawled across her bed, one arm flung over his head, the shadow of a beard darkening his cheeks. Asleep, he looked more like the boy than the man. Honey hesitated, staring at him in the early morning light.
He shifted, opening his eyes. He locked on her, confusion clouding his face before being replaced by a slow, heated smiled. "Honey," he drawled, reaching one hand for her.
Honey squared her shoulders and sauntered to the bed. "Isn't it time for you to go home to your wife," she paused meaningfully, "and baby?"
Todd's smile dimmed. He sat up in a fluid motion, the sheets dropping from around his waist. Reaching for her wrist, he gripped her, pulling her towards him. "That's not 'good morning' and it sure as hell isn't sweet."
"Stop it, Todd. We've got to talk about this."
Todd nuzzled her neck. "We don't have to talk about anything." He slipped the robe from her shoulders, nibbling a spot at the base of her neck.
"I'm not going to do this anymore," Honey moaned.
She was wrong.
This post was a continuation of my running storyline. It happens after The Fight and during The Aftermath. If you'd like to read more, click on Fictional Mandyland.
It was inspired by The Red Dress Club prompt: write a post beginning with the words, "This was absolutely the last time" and ending with "She was wrong."
57 comments:
I love how you use the mask image throughout. You add some more depth to Honey, making her complex and full of actual feeling.
And could Todd be more of a cad?
Lovely description. Both characters are so easy to see in my mind. I think you are missing the word "not" here "I'm going to do this anymore," Honey moaned.
I also liked how well it flowed. Well done!
Wow! Just wow. I love and hate the characters- perfect.
You really painted a picture here in so few words. The story is already sexy, sad, and has depth.
You've really created depth to Honey's characted with the mask elements! Excellent job. The quick crumbling of her resolve happens so quickly, but unfortunately is very realistic.
You've made me feel sympathy towards a character who shouldn't deserve it. That's Honey. Not Todd. Todd needs a flaming case of syphilis.
(only other thing I spotted other than adding the "not," is "fallen" instead of "falled" in para 9.
Loving the layers and characters in your tale!!!
Oh I really liked this! Can't wait for the next installment!
Awesome. I love stories about whores and this one was totally different from most that I encounter. It was really well written and I got the feeling that it would be possible for me to get a shot at her, if in fact I were the type of person to nail someone else''s wife. Nice job!
Sheesh! This is so well written and scandalous! I love the conflicting emotions you created through your character. She's three dimensional and human. Excellent writing.
oh how I loved this Mandy, loed, loved, loved it. I almost feel bad for Honey, not having the life she imagined, willing to live for those stolen hours with Todd. WOW. So good.
PURE TALENT lady, I'm in awe. :)
Wow!!! I can't wait to read the next segment in Honey's life! I hope Todd takes a flying leap.....
I definitely just sat here and read every single one of your fiction writings (is that a word?). You are an amazing writer and I really wish you had a book that I could read. I need a good book and Lady, you could write it. Do something about that, will ya?
Todd's a "playa" isn't he? And Honey, I love her complexity. Great characters. Good read. :)
Honey seems to be a hurt little girl inside looking for someone to really love her. She'll take whatever she can get at this moment trying to fill the emptiness inside. I love this character and the way you describe her in such detail right down to the description of her makeup (mask). Wow! Visiting from TRDC
I love this. I love the complexity and the visuals that you created. I want more
The device of watching Honey recreate herself for the day was a perfect metaphor for the thought process that she was having. Assuming that I read this right, and that they had dated in High School, goes a long way to explain their connection and to highlight the fact that Todd is truly an immature schmuck. That he really hasn't emotionally evolved since High School which in part made me want him to leave Carrie, since she's got her hands full with the newborn and doesn't need two babies in the house.
I also found myself wishing that Honey would resist him, not just for Carries sake but for her own. It was a really great way to add more dimensions to this story.
I could have kept on reading. Really well written. Great details.
Fantastic. I love that you call makeup her "mask".
I had to go back and re-read the other entries so I had a clear picture.
Love this story line. I love how you are bouncing back and forth between characters so we get a full picture. It's not just how one person sees it, it's from a variety of POV's
Great job
Oh, and I'm not liking Todd AT ALL. Loser
Oh Honey!! I just want to gather you up and give you a big hug, and a strong dose of self-esteem, and a fresh start.
I want to give Todd a big punch.
Great writing....as always!
Oh, poor Honey. How any times have we each said we do that one thing, one last time? I
love how flawed she is. So relatable. So human. I,too, want to punch Todd but that's just a testament to how authentic your characters are. Such strong writing. Enjoyed this!
Well. If you plan on us ever having any sympathy for Todd you certainly have your work cut out for you. Dirtbag.
(Great job, loved every second)
Ohh I knew she'd give in!
I so love that she calls the wife betty crocker! Ha
The visuals were exquisite... I feel for her... that's a tough spot to be in.
More please!!
You described the suction that a multitude of bad decisions can have on a person perfectly!
Poor Honey is in a downward spiral. I really hope she finds enough strength to pull herself out.
I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Of course she gave in! She's in love with the jerk.
I keep thinking I'll find a way to redeem him, but sometimes people are just not good.
As weird as it is, Honey is actually one of my favorite characters. Mostly because of her flaws.
Before I write any of the "chapters", I re-read everything else. Each of the characters are so different from each other and they all interact in such unique ways.
I was as shocked as anyone else when I discovered that Honey was sleeping with Todd and then...when he was with her the night of the storm! Total jerk.
Isn't it always? :D
Thank you!
She was supposed to move to Vegas with Todd but then her mom was diagnosed with cancer. Shortly after, Todd married Carrie - without breaking up with Honey.
Honey is still in love with Todd in that teenage dream way.
Thank you!
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I really love writing about Honey. She's so real.
I'm working on it!
I have a feeling Todd will hang around like a bad smell for a while.
Yay! I'm glad you liked it!
She's not really bad. A little selfish. A little hard. But not bad. I wanted that to come through in this piece. She's had a rough life and she's had to fight for everything she wanted. In a way, she sees Todd as this perfect man who will "save" her.
I wouldn't call her a whore. Flawed, perhaps. But...in her mind, Todd is, and always has been, hers.
I'm glad you liked it!
Thanks, partner.
Your comment made me laugh out loud. And then giggle. And then snort. And then think....hmmm....
She was so ready to end it and then she saw the boy she loved instead of the man he is.
Thank you!
Thanks for finding that typo! Without that one word, the whole meaning changes. lol
I don't know...do you think he could be? ;)
That does not seem weird to me at all.
I hope to see good things in her future.
If only I knew someone who had control of that....... ;-)
Oooh! I loved this glimpse into Honey's psyche! You made me want to root for her to kick Todd's sorry butt out of there and to get on with being fab again! xo
Todd is vile.
Honey is... less so. Who knew?
You mean "I'm not going to do this anymore?"
And way to bring the heat. Someone's been doing her homework...
Oh, that Honey...Love that she calls Carrie 'Betty Crocker'...haha.
Todd...what a schmuck.
Todd was already on my shit list. LOL. He's buried deep on that list now. I'm not sure you CAN redeem him at this point. Haha. You created such a perfect "villain". I love this excerpt. I love the way you made me feel like Honey was just another victim in Todd's gameplan too. I'm hoping both she and Carrie come out on top.
Great writing, even if you did laugh at me. :P
Well now. Todd sinks further and Honey....well, not so sure I'm thrilled with her, but am beginning to understand her more. Funny how back story can begin to change a mind.
Favorite bits and pieces: love that I can feel myself silently walking through the scene with your characters, love that I can feel their movements, love "Shrugging away the guilt, she started to put on her mask.", calling Carrie 'Betty Crocker', telling us she's 'working two jobs to pay off hospital bills' and giving Honey a strength we hadn't known before, and the perfect way you used the prompt. You pull me in every time.
I've been a bit MIA, overwhelmed by the insanity that May brings our lives over here, but spent the last while catching up on your online home. I saved this piece for last as I knew, I *knew* that it would be an alluring fantastical place to slip away to after the kidlets were in bed. And as always, can't wait for more! :>
I can't help but hope that she does, eventually, knock him out of her life.
Can I just say, I love my homework. ;)
It's my favorite part. She's so snide and somewhat rude to Carrie, but at the same time, she feels like she has reason.
I couldn't help laughing!!!!
And you're right...I just don't see how Todd can be redeemed or if he even deserves it.
I'm so glad I was able to help you escape for a bit.
Honey is becoming one of my favorite characters. She's a bitch, other woman, snide and still...there's something about her that I like.
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