"So..." Kate said slyly, "what's going on with you and Henry?"
I looked down and watched my fingers trace a red wine stain on the white tablecloth. "Nothing."
"Uh-huh," she replied, unconvinced. "That's why you guys couldn't stop talking to each other all night." She looked over at Henry and Brian, watching them for a moment. Turning to me, her eyes became serious. "Ellie?"
"Hmm?" I replied absently, staring at a certain cowboy.
"I want," she paused and took a breath, "I want you to know that I'm sorry. I stole your boyfriend and that's against the BFF Code. I'm so, so sorry."
I reached for her hand and gripped it in mine. "We've been over this before. You didn't steal anybody. I was just keeping an eye on him until he met you."
"Really?"
"Really." I gave her hand a squeeze and then released it. "Kate, you have to stop feeling guilty. I'm fine. More than fine. Besides," I took a sip of wine, "Brian never looked at me the way he looks at you."
Kate reached over and hugged me. I squeezed her, happy that I was able to speak the truth. She pulled away and gave me a watery smile. "Look at us! Three glasses of wine and we're acting like we used to after a night out."
"I love you, man!" We both convulsed into giggles.
"That's it! I'm cutting you two off," Brian said walking around the end of the table. Reaching up he tapped a hanging lantern with one hand and winked at Kate. "I was just telling my future brother-in-law that he needs to go to the beach before heading back to the Montana wilderness."
"It's not exactly wilderness," Henry interrupted.
"Close enough," Brian waved his hand in dismissal. "I need to drive my beautiful bride-to-be home and make sure she gets her beauty sleep. So, that leaves Ellie to play tour guide."
"Subtle, Brian. Real subtle," Kate muttered next to me.
I ignored her and looked at Henry. "Do you want to?"
"I do."
Saying our goodbyes, Henry and I walked out the front of the building, passing the bench where I'd poured out my heart. We walked around the hedges lining the parking lot, crossed the street and stood at the edge of the sidewalk, our feet already touching sand, the ocean glittering in the moonlight. Balancing on one leg, I slipped off my shoes, lightly touching his arm for balance.
"Aren't you going to take off yours?"
"Nah. I'll just get sandy."
"Listen. If you don't take off your shoes, I'm going back to my car and heading home. You can't come to the beach and not feel the sand between your toes. Now," I pointed, "Take them off."
"Wow, you're bossy."
"Watch it." I waited while he pulled off his cowboy boots and rolled up his jeans. "Hold on. I'm parked right there." Taking his boots from him, I walked over to my car and threw them in the back seat along with my shoes and purse. Locking the door, I turned and jumped, startled to find him so close.
"You didn't have to follow me."
"It wouldn't be very gentlemanly of me not to."
"Please," I rolled my eyes. "Who's gentlemanly in this day and age?"
"Me," he growled.
"Did you just," I swallowed, "growl?"
"I've been known to do that." He edged a little closer. I took a step backwards and felt the cool metal of the car against my spine.
"You've been known to growl?"
"On occasion," he whispered, leaning in closer. He raised his hand to lightly caress my cheek. "I've been thinking all night about how you'd taste."
Nervously, I licked my lips, my eyes darting to his mouth, as his warm breath brushed me. "Have you?" I murmured. Slowly closing my eyes, I leaned closer. His lips, firm yet soft touched mine. Tentative at first and then, with more pressure. He wrapped his arms around my back and pulled me closer. Sighing I relaxed into his hold and there, at the edge of a moonlit beach, with my back against my car and my toes on cool cement, the whole world shifted.
This post is a work of fiction inspired by The Red Dress Club's writing prompt. This week we were asked to write a 700 word piece begining with the words, "I could never have imagined" and ending with "Then the whole world shifted."
I hope you enjoy hearing more about Henry and Ellie. If you missed the other bits of their story, go here and here. Please let me know what you think.
24 comments:
Wowza. Hot. Beautifully done. Your eye for detail (ex: tracing the wine stains) was pitch perfect. Home run, friend.
This? Is perfect. I cannot believe you were "stuck" or worried about posting. Amazing job, you are a fantastic writer and I love Henry.
That was deliciously steamy. Loved it. Your description was excellent. I could feel that sand between my toes!
I am falling head over heels for those two! Henry and Ellie, swoon...
Keeping an eye on him was great, as was the "I love you man" I love how bossy she is! Plus so much detail! Tapping the lantern, tracing the wine stain...love, love, love!
That would have been an awesome twist - a cowboy vampire. I would have called it "And Then He Bit Me".
Woo! But I know you're just partial because, you know, we're friends. lol
I'm so glad that I described it well enough. I made my husband - the most literal person I know - read it to let me know if he could "picture" the scene. The first three drafts, he said no. This one? FINALLY yes.
*sigh* I'm a romantic at heart. LOVE a good kissing scene.
Thank you! I thought I upped the tension a bit. :)
Thank you! A little scary posting this without making of you read it first. But that's what happens when I procrastinate. lol
Wow!! I want a cowboy named Henry.
Love the dialogue! And that he growled...Awesome.
Yeah. I kind of read that wrong. *blush* And still went over. *more blushing*
Don't you just love a man who growls? I told Chad that and he just said, "Okaaaay."
The man just doesn't get it.
You and me both! I've got a sports watcher named Chad. He's pretty cool too. But Henry? Eh. He might have to be on my List.
I love these two. I love not only that Henry growls but that Ellie asks him if he growled, that moment seemed the first real foreshadowing to what their relationship will be like.
You wrote one of the the best, most selfless lines I have ever read. Ever. I love this story, I love Ellie, I love the feelings it invokes. Kudos!
Yay! I'm so glad you continued with this story. And I loved the growling. And the cowboy. Yummy.
I just went back and read the other two posts. One I had previously read. I am now officially and Ellie and Henry fan!
The growling cowboy. Not quite the same as the singing cowboy, but way sexier. ;)
I know, right? A cowboy at the beach is so...perfect.
I'm pretty happy that this nice girl is going to have some awesome karma come her way.
I'm SO glad you liked it. Especially since I'm addicted to your writing. Like seriously addicted. As in...I need a fix!
I'm usually pretty solid with dialogue, it's always the descriptions that stump me. My husband said I'd probably be better off writing scripts. Yeah. Me and every other person in California.
Nice! I'm gonna go read more.
Good writing.
I really liked your dialogue. I also thought the flow was very nice from beginning to end. Well done! And there's more to this story some where? Going to see if I can go find it!
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